PART 1:
Pilar begins each ninety-minute, verbal consultation with general notes focusing on ...
The main strengths and weaknesses of the script.
The hook and how it can be better exploited.
The characters and the places they come alive.
The areas of the story that grab the reader or need work.
The elements that motivate a script sale.

PART 2:
She then moves on to specific page notes, "script doctoring" ...
Sequences that need to be tightened.
Scenes that need to be compressed, moved or deleted.
Lines and passages of dialogue that need to be rewritten.
Formatting that needs a make-over.

The writer leaves the session with a sound rewrite plan and much of the work already completed.

Written notes available upon request and for an additional fee.

FEE:

INKTIP MEMBERS PLEASE TAKE AN ADDITIONAL $25.00 DISCOUNT!

Feature consultation (in person): $300.00
Feature consultation (phone): $275.00
One-hour television script: $225.00
Half-hour television script: $200.00
Feature or television treatment: $175.00
Pitch / Story consultation: $150.00

Submitting and Scheduling

1. Schedule an appointment in advance by sending an e-mail to inquire@onthepage.tv.
2. E-mail your script as a Final Draft or PDF attachment to inquire@onthepage.tv.
3. At the time of the appointment call (818) 905-8124 or come to the On the Page Studio.
4. Make sure to have a copy of your script in front of you on which to take notes.

Scripts can be received up to two days in advance of the appointment.
Scripts can also be sent by regular mail to ON THE PAGE PO Box 18798
Encino, CA 91416. Please do not send overnight or by any method requiring a signature.

Pilar and ON THE PAGE enjoy working with talented writers. If you have any additional questions, please feel free to e-mail inquire@onthepage.tv OR call (818) 905-8124 regarding this service or screenwriting classes.

TESTIMONIALS:

Like many of us trying to become screenwriters, I had a "first-draft paperweight" on my desk for months. With Pilar’s help, they've transformed from desk clutter into calling cards. Recently I've been hired by Warner Bros. to write a book adaptation, signed with ICM and am a new member of the WGA. I can honestly say that I wouldn't be in the position I am today if it weren't for Pilar and "On the Page."
-- Bill Birch
Feature Writer Warner Bros "The Pre-Astronauts" and "Weekend Warrior"

Pilar's razor-sharp critique of my TV spec script for HOUSE helped me get into the 2007 Disney Writing Fellowship. Pilar pays attention to easily missed details with straightforward analysis of character, motivation and plot that will improve any script. Pilar solves your writing problems. She is a fixer and your writing will benefit.
-- Gayle Jackson
2007 Disney Writing Fellow

With a decade of experience working with writers, Pilar quickly uncovers a script's weaknesses while understanding and supporting the writer's individual vision. She is equally adept at sculpting tone, theme and structure as she is dialogue and character arcs.
Pilar keeps pace with the fast changing industry, creating a balance between the art of writing and the important commercial business end. She develops neophyte writers as easily as she improves professional writing. Simply put, Pilar makes getting script notes enjoyable. I have improved my craft tremendously under her tutelage.
--Laurence Walsh
Writer "CSI Miami," "NCIS" and "The Dresden Files"
Feature writer for Universal