TWO BRADS OR THREE?
or:
Adventures in Judging Screenplay Entries in a Film Festival

21 Ways to Better Your Chances of Winning
When Entering Screenplay Competitions
by:
ELIZABETH ENGLISH
Founder & Executive Director
Moondance International Film Festival

Suggestion #1:
Please send your submissions in early! Don't wait until the final deadline date! Your submission can be buried under a pile of hundreds or thousands at the bigger festivals and competitions. The readings could be hurried. Maybe the reader saw one sent in earlier and has decided that's his or her favorite.

Suggestion #2:
Two words: Two brads. Brass brads, SOLID brass brads #6, not those short, wimpy brass-plate brads that let the script fall apart by page 60. Acco has them at Office Max & Office Depot by special order. Try to find or special-order those little brass washers (to fit the #6 brads), too. They seriously hold the script together, even to the last page. Readers curl the script pages behind what they've read; they leave them overnight, half-read, to read next day. Your script is roughly handled, by three or four people. Make sure it stays together through all of that!

Suggestion #3:
Covers: please use plain cover-stock or card-stock. Print only the script title & author name on the front. Any color is OK, but white, grey or tan are preferred & more professional- looking. Do not bind your script in a highschool plastic binder or one with metal bars inside. Nothing else is acceptable but front and back card-stock covers.

Suggestion #4:
Title Page: Please have the first page of your submission be the title page. Print the title, author's name, info on copyright or WGA-registration, and the author's contact info: mailing address, phone number & e-mail address.

If you change your address, phone number or e-mail address, please let the festival know this right away, so they can contact you if you win! Send e-mail addresses for co-authors to be notified of script's status in contest.

Suggestion #5:
Do not write the title or your name on the binding side of the script. That makes the script look old & shopped-around. The festival readers or registration people will do that when they receive the entry.

Suggestion #6:
A printed-out copy of the script from your computer looks a lot better than a copy-shop's or a Xeroxed, faded copy. Make sure it's nice and clear and clean, with black ink. It's actually cheaper to print out a computer copy than it is to take it somewhere to be printed, in most cases.

Suggestion #7:
Use COURIER 12 point font. Nothing else will do.

Suggestion #8:
Do not try to cheat by doing a "loose" script to make your script look like 120 pages. Do not do a "tight" script, to try to make a too-long script look like 120 pages. If you have a 90-page script, that's fine. If you have a 150-page script, you need to do some editing.Check every page of your submission, to make sure it's printed clearly and that the pages are in order and none are missing.

Suggestion #9:
Have someone who is an English-major read your script for typos, incorrect grammar (except in the dialog, if that's what you intend anyway), punctuation, spelling, syntax & other errors. You could offer to pay him or her a dollar for each error found (with which you agree). This will make you really edit in advance, like crazy, to save yourself the expense! Don't ever rely only on your spell-check program. Print out the script and read it in hard-copy, and edit as you read. Use a red pen, so you can easily find the edits when you do the re-write. Spend the time to correct the errors. Nothing makes an author look more lazy and unprofessional as lots of un-edited errors in your submission.

Suggestion #10:
Format: use the standard script format found in books on the subject and in computer screenwriting programs. Don't customize it. Use correct, standard spacing between elements and in all four of the margins.

Suggestion #11:
I would love to see the second page of your submission be the logline and mini-synopsis! Film festivals and prodco readers don't usually ask for this, or require it, but it would make reading the screenplay a lot easier and more enjoyable. Plus, if your logline is great, it induces the reader to put your screenplay submission at the TOP of his or her pile of must- read-now.

Suggestion # 12:
Give your submission a GREAT title! I got a script submission last year entitled "THE TENT". I didn't want to read it. I didn't want to go to my entry-form files & read her logline and synopsis, based on that title. It went to the bottom of the pile to be read when I absolutely HAD to. Well, guess what? When I finally read the script, it was very good, and made the Moondance 2001 semi-finalist list! I asked the author if she'd consider changing the title. She couldn't think of one, until I reminded her that she had the title within the screenplay dialog: DANCE WITH ME, ALASKA. Even her agent loved the new title!

Suggestion #13:
Don't send in long resumés and lists of credits or info about your other festival wins with your entry forms and submission. It won't help you win. It won't (or shouldn't) influence the readers and judges, because each festival has different criteria. (Film entrants should feel free, however, to do this.)

Suggestion #14:
Entry fees: Attach the check or money-order with a paper-clip (don't staple it in) to the front of the entry form. If it's a US festival or competition, make sure the funds are in US dollars. Don't just toss the entry fee into the bottom of the envelope. When sending a money-order, write your name on it, so we know who it's from. When sending a check from someone else, write your name on it, for the same reason.

Suggestion #15:
Mailing: use the simplest packaging form possible, one that's easy and quick to open. Don't tape it together as if the contents were made of gold. Avoid the use of those envelopes that are full of grey fluffy stuff that gets all over desks and clothes and the floor when the reader has finally managed to slice it open. That grey stuff damages videos, too. A script generally does not need padded envelopes.

Suggestion #16:
Postage: use enough postage to cover the cost of mailing. Most festivals and competitions will not pay the postage due, and your entry will probably be returned to you, un-opened.

Suggestion #17:
Entry forms and release forms: Please fill them out CLEARLY in black ink. Sign them. Print them, rather than using fancy cursive writing in purple or pink ink. Make sure your e-mail address is clear. If you have a mix of zeros (0) and the letter O, make sure they can be read for what they are. Same with the letter I & 1, or L & lower-case l. They all look the same sometimes, so be clear, if you ever want to hear from the festival again. MAGOO0011Ill@aol.com is hard to figure out.

Suggestion #18:
Remember to enclose the entry form, release form and entry fee with your script in the same envelope.

Suggestion #19:
If you want a confirmation that your submission was received, please send (with your submission package) an attached post card with US postage (if entering a US competition). Write on the postcard: your name and address in the mail-to area, and on the back or in the message area, write: (name of festival) has received the screenplay (title of your entry) on this date_________.

Suggestion #20:
Do not send an SASE (self-addressed, stamped envelope) with your submission if the festival or competition announces that they will not return any entries or submissions. You'll be wasting the postage.

Suggestion #21:
Make sure your entire submission package is reader-friendly!

Every one of the above 21 suggestions are based on personal experience of mistakes former entrants made when submitting materials to Moondance or to other festivals and competitions.

As for the content of your screenplay; structure counts, usually. Have a clear Act I, II, and III. Try to hook the reader on the first page! Make the first five (or ten pages at most) be Act I, wherein you introduce all the main characters and show the reader the who, what, where, when and why of your story. Notice that I said SHOW. Telling is not so good. Film is a visual medium and you should actually be writing a FILM, not a script.

Act II is the rest of the story, where you build on what you started, and it climaxes at the clear end of Act II. Act III should be five or ten (max) pages, where all loose ends are tied up and all conflicts are resolved.

Make sure you've defined your characters and have given them unique qualitites special to them, so they are recognizable as individual people and have depth. Same with the dialog. Don't have every character speak the same. Or as you speak. Let the environment and ambience of the settings be shown. Mention weather and seasons and time of day or night. Make sure your characters visibly REACT to each other, and to dialog spoken to them.

Have conflict, whether personal, local, national, or world-side... or even universal. Then resolve that conflict at the end.

Avoid too many clichés in characterizations, dialog, actions and reactions. Do something new and interesting. Avoid like the plague having your actors speak long lines of exposition! Actors and directors and the audience hate to hear a character verbally explaining what he or she is thinking, planning, worrying about, or is going to do, or did in the past. Action! Show it, don't tell it!

Every word of dialog and every word of action and exposition in your screenplay must move the story forward toward its conclusion. Every scene must move the story forward. The screenplay should read like a good novel, and the reader should not want to put it down until the end.

Remember transitions. Each scene should flow into the next, logically, or be hinted at in a previous scene. Don't make the reader wonder where we are in this scene. Lead them into it. If your two characters will be going out for pizza in the next scene, or are going to rob a bank, hint at that in the previous scene(s). Set it up for the pay-off. You can have many set- ups and pay-offs, all moving the story forward and building toward the ending pay-off, which resolves the conflict.

Write your dialog and scenes for specific actors you may have in mind, and imagine them reading your script to see if they'd like to play the parts. Give the stars and lead characters the best lines and the best action. Try to write memorable dialog& /or memorable action. The actors and the directors love it and this stuff sticks in the audiences' minds. Remember, somebody has to spend millions of dollars on your idea, if they like it. It has to make them a profit. Most studios and production companies are not only in the business of making movies; they're also in the business of making MONEY.

Don't write a director's script. Don't have scene numbers on the sluglines. Don't use cut-to or dissolve-to any more than you absolutely have to. No camera angles, unless it's vital. Try to keep the number of sluglines to 85-100 max. Each scene change costs production money.

And finally: The more professional and reader-friendly your entire submission package is, the better your chances are of winning a competition and of selling that screenplay. Remember, when entering a competition, if your script wins or is a finalist, or even a semi-finalist, producers and agents will ask you for it, and the festival will want to be proud to have selected your screenplay!

Elizabeth English is Founder & Executive Director of Moondance International Film Festival.
She also provides a script editing website: www.mermaid7seas.com